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Week 4 – Journal

Rough Draft Review Process Evaluation

[WLOS: 1, 2, 3, 4, 5] [CLOS: 1, 2, 3, 4, 5]

Purpose: The primary goal of this weekly assignment is to enable you to understand the revision process and revise your paper with the help of a writing specialist.

Prepare:

Step 1: Prepare a shortened version of your Final Paper (at least four pages) by including the following:

• Introduction paragraph and thesis statement you developed for your Week 3 Assignment.
• Background information of the global societal issue you have chosen.
• Brief argument supporting at least two solutions to the global societal issue.
• Conclusion paragraph.
• Must document any information used from at least five scholarly sources in APA style as outlined in the Ashford Writing Center’s Citing Within Your Paper (Links to an external site.)Links to an external site. Note that you will need at least eight scholarly sources for your Final Paper in Week 5.

Step 2: After you have completed a rough draft of your paper, submit that draft to the Ashford Writing Center by using the instructions found in the

Paper Review (Links to an external site.)Links to an external site.

page. Your paper will be returned within 24 hours, so give yourself enough time to complete and submit it prior to the due date.

Reflect: Carefully review the revision letter and the margin comments that you see on your returned paper. Consider each of the suggestions provided to help you to revise your paper.

Write:

What You Need to Submit to Waypoint:

• Submit a copy of the feedback within your rough draft that you received from the writing specialist.
• Submit the journal assignment answering the following questions in at least 400 words:

  Identify the top three issues your writing specialist focused on in your rough draft (e.g., paragraph structure, proper use of quotations, thesis statement, etc.).

  In what ways were those issues surprising?

  Describe what you learned from some of the feedback your writing specialist provided as explanations.

  Was this feedback helpful?

  Evaluate the usefulness of the paper review tool.

  In what ways did this activity improve your academic writing skills?
  Will you use the Ashford Writing Center to review your work in the future? Why or why not?

The journal part of the assignment does not need to be formatted in APA style; however correct grammar, spelling, and punctuation is required.

Carefully review the

Grading Rubric (Links to an external site.)Links to an external site.

for the criteria that will be used to evaluate your journal

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Paper Title: Social Media Censorship Introduction Thesis statement Annotated Bibliography

No. of Pages: 3 Pages

Paper Style: APA Paper Type: Annotated Bibliography

Taken English? Yes English as Second Language? No

Feedback Areas: Focus/Thesis Statement, Topic Development

Paper Goals: Rough Draft Review Process Evaluation Identify the top three issues your writing

specialist focused on in your rough draft (e.g., paragraph structure, proper use of

quotations, thesis statement, etc.). In what ways were those issues surprising?

Describe what you learned from some of the feedback yo

Proofing Summary:

Hi, Jayson

I’m Stephen, your composition tutor for the Writing Center. I have reviewed your submission and have

several suggestions that will help you revise. Please feel free to contact us through a live chat session

with any follow-up questions or for any clarification.

Below, you will find a revision plan along with margin comments within your paper. Use my suggestions

as a starting point for the revision process. Also, please note that I have not edited or proofread the

entire draft for minor errors, but rather, focused on overall concerns such as idea development. For a

complete look at your grammar and punctuation, please use the Grammarly software available under

“Writing Center” in your classroom.

It doesn’t seem as if you have done this assignment correctly. You are supposed to write a rough draft

of your final paper, which is separate from the annotated bibliography that you did last week. You are

supposed to use the sources that you found last week, and begin using them to make your paper for

this week. Please make sure that you do this.

For your revisions, I suggest focusing on:

1. In addition to making sure that you are writing a paper, you may also want to check and make sure

that you are making this a “global” societal issue, and not just one that the United States has. Looking at

your thesis statement, as well as some of your sources, your paper seems to be focused around this

aspect of “fake news”. While you want to be careful with this (as fake news isn’t necessarily the same

thing as social media censorship), you also want to make sure that you are showing that your problem is

a “global societal problem”. This means that, if you are going to focus on fake news, you must show that

other countries outside of the United States has that problem. Make sure to do that, as you work on your

rough draft, and look for more sources to help you write your paper.

Good luck in the course, and I hope we can help you with your next assignment.

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Please make sure that you are

focusing on how this is a “global”

societal issue. Remember, not every

country on the globe is a democracy.

Make sure that you remove these

hyperlinks when you move them to

a Reference page.

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You should also make sure to

remove any text that shouldn’t be

in your citations.

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