Communicating in Your Profession: Revising and Editing Professional Emails

Competency

Apply Concepts of Professional Writing to Prewriting, Drafting, Revising, and Editing.

Instructions

Below are two professional emails. Read through each of the emails copy and paste them to a Word Document. Edit them utilizing the Review tab in Microsoft Word. Please review each email, finding all errors in grammar, vocabulary, spelling, punctuation and professionalism.

After you have completed editing and revising the email, pick one of the two and re-write the email so that it is free of all spelling, grammar and content errors and is professional and informative.

Email #1

From:

Tricia Marcus

To: Allison Brown

Subject: Today’s Meeting

Hey Allison!

I am looking forward to seeing you today for our meeting. I’ve attached the materials needed for our discussion. Let me know if you have any questions.

Regards,

Tricia Marcus

Marketer Extraordinaire

hotpartychick@triciamarketing.com

(555) 545-5656

“Be so good they can’t ignore you.” – Steve Martin

Email #2

To: Bob Pope

From:

Gabrielle Mendes

Subject: Job?

Hey Bob, We talked a couple weeks back at the chamber of commerce event. (I was the one looking for a summer internship and had a zit on my lip that could have passed for a cold soar. Lol. Whew. It was not. You’re probably like, “uh.. What?” Maybe that helps you recall, maybe not. Not completely important, I suppose.

I’d really like to come work for you at your IT business. You seemed like a cool person to work for, I liked ur striped pants. I’m available to start working on Monday, but I am taking my driver’s test in June and have to study and go an hour and half away to take it at an easier place cause I’m not a great driver so I’ll miss a few days. I am also going to the beach with friends for a week in July. Oh, and my grandmother has bad gas (OMG IT’S TERRIBLE) and sometimes I have to take her to the doctor.

I’ve attached my resume, it’s the bomb dot com. Let me know if you have a job opening for me. I can’t wait to play on some computers. If I don’t respond to your email, I’m always on FB, snapchat or insta!

Peace out,

Gabrielle Mendes